Rate this poem for me?

I would like to preface this by saying that poetry is a form of release and it is all good, it is just not all meant for the public. This reminds me a lot of assignments that i would give out while assisting a writing teacher i once had - it sounds as though you were either given specific words or and or ideas to use, and or certain types of metaphor. it is a solid concept, all consuming love and passion for a woman - but it is crippled delivery. some of the words that you are using are either used completely incorrectly and out of context, OR they are not explained well if at all. you jump from large words and deep ideas to shallow items, reference pagan and christian mythos illogically, and it is at times repetitive. either you do not feel what you have written or you have a very hard time translating emotions into verse. if the latter is the case then i would recommend reflecting on each line as part of the whole and determine if it is really conveying what you are emoting.